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Sample
Essay: English Major
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"That's not
fair." Even as the smallest of children, I remember making
such a proclamation: in kindergarten it was "not fair" when
I had to share my birthday with another little girl and didn't
get to sit on the "birthday chair." When General Mills changed
my favorite childhood breakfast cereal, "Kix," I, of course,
thought this was "not fair." Unlike many kids (like my brother)
who would probably have shut up and enjoyed the "great new
taste" or switched to Cheerios, this kid sat her bottom down
in a chair (boosted by the phone book) and typed a letter to
the company expressing her preference for the "classic" Kix
over the "great new taste" Kix.
Through the
plenty of "not fair" incidents that followed, my mother tried
to explain that unfair things happen sometimes, but I never
accepted the idea of an unfair world and began to realize that
there were a great many situations and conditions that were "not
fair" to women.
At age ten,
I was mortified that all the boys in my Catechism class were
signing up to be altar servers, but girls could not. When my
grandmother told me that, at one time, because she was a woman,
she was only allowed to touch the altar when she was cleaning
it-the fight against the Catholic Church was on. Once again,
I sat my bottom down in the chair (still with the phone book)
and typed a letter to the Monsignor requesting to be trained
as an altar server. With no immediate response, I respectfully
but persistently harassed the Monsignor and the other priests
every Sunday when I saw them in church, until, nearly two years
later, I became an altar server. At age twelve I was almost
too old to appreciate the new privilege, but there are girls
becoming altar servers in that church to this day.
Fighting
against things "not fair" for women has been my goal throughout
my education, just as it will be in my future, and I have had
several unique opportunities toward this end.
I have worked
two summers in a Sacramento, California, law firm for the managing
partner, a brilliant litigator and a woman who really cares
about justice, on two of the biggest cases of her career. I
performed legal research relevant to the issues of spoliation
and antitrust, and I directly assisted Ms. F with trial preparation,
accompanying her to court during the trials. Under her guidance
I have learned the inner workings of litigation, and I have
seen that unfairness pervades all types of law. Having experienced
litigation, I know the heavy work load that characterizes trial
preparation and can safely say that I approach a legal career
aware of its realities.
I have also
participated in the [school] Center for American Politics and
Public Policy (CAPPP) Quarter in Washington program, which
allowed me to take classes at the [school] Center and intern
at the National Women's Law Center in D.C. The Law Center showed
me the public interest side of law, the area of law that I
hope to enter in order to address the women's issues that are
so important to me. Public interest offers the opportunity
to help women who need it the most, those who could not otherwise
afford legal assistance and who are often victims of the "not
fair," of violations of their civil rights.
My classes
at [school] and through CAPPP, as well as my participation
in the volunteer program at the [school] Women's Resource Center,
have afforded me the chance to research issues of the "not
fair" for women. Violence against women, an unfairness that
maims and rapes and kills, has evolved into a special interest
of mine that I hope to pursue through future work in a sex
crimes division in criminal prosecution. For two classes at
[school] I have researched domestic violence and battered women
who kill their abusers. While in Washington, D.C., I studied
acquaintance rape among adolescents: after making an extensive
review of the existing literature, I tried to conduct original
research interviewing teenagers at a recreation center in Alexandria,
Virginia.
Though at
the last moment the recreation center directors did not authorize
my project, I did discover a class called "Self-Defense is
More than Karate" that was developed by the Office on Women
in Alexandria to instruct high school students on relationships,HIV/AIDS,
dating violence, and sexual assault. After I observed one week
of the program, the Community Education Coordinator asked me
to research how such education influences teens, interviewing
students before and after they take the class, for the Office
on Women. Currently, I seek a research grant from the [school]
College Honors Program that would allow me to go back to D.C.
in the spring to carry out this project.
Fighting
the "not fair" is certainly a driving force for me; however,
I have chosen to pursue law not only because I consider it
to be a weapon against injustice, but also because it fascinates
me. My love for the law echoes my love for literature. I participated
in theater in high school and majored in English in college
because I enjoy analyzing the subtleties, innuendos, and themes
that serve as the foundation of a literary work or a dramatic
performance. I strive to understand the stories behind the
characters involved. I am awed by the power of language and
the influence art and literature can have on the values, thoughts,
and actions of the audience. So goes the influence on the law:
they call it "courtroom drama" for a reason. Just as literature
tells a story, so does each legal case, be it criminal or civil;
the way in which the law applies to each case must be analyzed
and, in some instances, constructed.Law reflects as much as
it influences the beliefs of the people it governs.
Both law
and literature are instruments of change. Furthermore, literature
and law can give voice to people who have been traditionally
silenced. Just as I love so much to hear the voices of others
through literature, I want to use my voice in the realm of
the law, calling out "not fair" for those who have not been
heard. I want to have a positive influence on the lives of
women and all people, be it in the civil or criminal realm,
and in law school I hope to gain the tools to do just that.
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High School
Teacher with AIDS; SCID/Genetics Research Experience; HIV
Counselor
Before I
found out that my high school Spanish teacher was HIV-positive,
AIDS was not much more than a bunch of statistics to me. The
disease, its course, and the people afflicted with it seemed
alien to my life-as distant as the continent from which the
virus was supposed to have sprung. Then Mr. T. stopped coming
to school. When he reappeared a few months later to wish us
well on the advanced placement exam, his face looked sallow.
His voice, once a thunderous bass that rumbled in class and
reverberated down the hallway, was weak and thin. Seeing my
teacher looking so unfamiliar was my shocking introduction
to AIDS. I felt as if I were in the presence of a stranger,
this mysterious disease, who was insulting Mr. T. right in
front of my eyes. I wanted to know who this stranger was.
I entered
college, believing that biology could explain to me why life's
processes went awry. I learned that the body is exquisitely
complex, but I was reassured by the underlying theme of systems.
Even if I didn't know all the molecules and connections, there
seemed no denying that a fundamental order existed.
From physiology
to cell biology to molecular genetics, my classes presented
smaller and smaller systems to explain the origins of diseases.
Finally, in genes, with their innocuous four letter alphabet,
I felt I was learning the foundation of it all. If biology
provided the keys to understanding life, then genetics must
be the master key (if only we could see some of the doors we
were trying to open). During two summers in a research laboratory
at The Children's Hospital of Philadelphia, I helped track
down the gene causing X-linked severe combined immunodeficiency
(SCID).
Even though
AIDS and SCID are very different diseases (SCID is exclusively
hereditary), each compromises the body's defense mechanisms
against foreign pathogens. I felt this was a significant connection.
In SCID, I was meeting a distant cousin of AIDS. Learning about
common themes of immunodeficiency disorders, such as the perils
of opportunistic infections, helped me to begin to understand
what had happened to Mr. T. In the SCID laboratory, and in
classroom seminars on infectious diseases, science was helping
me demystify disease.
In the same
year that Mr. T. became ill, my grandfather died during bypass
surgery and my father underwent chemotherapy and radiation
treatment for colon cancer. Since then, disease has had a human
face for me. To better understand how people deal with disease
or the fear of disease, I've become a volunteer counselor in
an HIV clinic.
Speaking
to people who come in for free testing, I've found that discussing
HIV, getting the scary words (and acronyms) out in the open,
is a way for many people to release their anxiety. Through
expression in their own words, they make the disease real,
which helps them to see that it is also preventable. Then,
they often take the next step, making specific goals to maintain
their health, whether they are HIV-negative or positive. What
science in class and lab did for me in confronting the difficult
issues of AIDS, talk does for my clients.
As an HIV
counselor in an anonymous clinic, I feel both the potential
of my role and its limits. I can't go home with my clients
to remind them to keep condoms under the bed, but I can help
them make a plan-something that could stay with them much longer
than the information I offer. At the end of one session, one
client surprised me with his response to a question I had asked: "What
do you think you'll do with the HIV information?" There was
a silence in the counseling room as the client pondered, but
I recall sensing the comfort of the silence. This was a session
that seemed to be producing the potential for a breakthrough
(not every session does), and I waited patiently. He responded, "I
think I'll ask my girlfriend to use her own needles." Then,
the client thanked me for having asked the question.
I was thrown.
My client proposed a strategy for reducing his HIV risk, but
he didn't address what was likely his main issue-heroin use.
Should I validate his plan? In effect, that's what I did, because
I didn't challenge the drug issue. When he left the clinic,
I practically wanted to follow him out the door. I wondered
if I would ever see him again and be able to ask him how his
plan was going. I wondered if he would ultimately seek help
for his drug use. My supervisor reminded me that I had done
my job as an HIV counselor. I had helped the client make a
plan; he had even thanked me for it.
And I can
thank him in return. He reminded me that although I have worked
to understand disease in the classroom, the laboratory, and
the clinic, I still have much to learn about caring for all
aspects of a patient's health. I am eager to continue the learning
process in the New Pathway Program at Harvard Medical School.
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Radiation
Oncology Volunteer; Biochemical Lab Experience; Neurosurgery
Research; ER Volunteer; English Language Tutor; Student Advisor;
Community Service
"Carl, the
woman we're about to meet will receive her first palliative
treatment today," said Dr. A., an Attending in Radiation Oncology.
He continued to explain her case as we walked briskly down
the hallways of the hospital. I followed him into the radiation
treatment room to meet the patient and learn about the procedure
which, sadly, would not eradicate her disease. Since then,
I have met with him weekly throughout this summer to learn
about radiation oncology and medicine in general. Through experiences
such as these, I have learned much about the profession of
medicine. I want to become a physician for the intellectual
challenges and rewards that come from helping others.
I first became
interested in medical research by working in a biochemical
engineering laboratory at MIT. For over two years I explored
the medically related field, biotechnology. I have led experiments
involving fermentation bioreactors and trained two inexperienced
undergraduates. Recently, I presented a poster entitled "Effect
of Antifoam during Filtration of Recombinant Bacterial Broth" at
a New England Society for Industrial Microbiology colloquium.
Enjoying the biomedical rather than engineering aspects of
the work, I have shifted my career interests to medicine.
Last summer,
I expanded my interest in medicine by working for the Neurosurgery
Department at Brigham and Women's Hospital. After a short training
period, I worked independently on three research projects:
Clonality analysis of schwannomas, clonality analysis of a
multiple meningioma, and the loss of heterozygosity (LOH) screening
of pituitary adenomas. I developed a strong interest in my
work when I observed my mentor, Dr. Peter Black, remove brain
tumors in the operating room. After the initial shock and amazement
of seeing the exposed brain of a conscious patient, I thought
more about the connections between this clinical work and my
research. While my projects' objective was to gain a better
understanding of tumors, the ultimate goal is to prevent and
cure tumors to save human lives-the very people whom I had
seen on the operating table! With this thought in mind, I found
the motivation to complete the short-term objectives of my
projects. I will be the second author of a paper, entitled "Clonality
Analysis of Schwannomas," which will be submitted to Neurosurgery.
This summer,
as a participant in NYU Medical Center's Summer Undergraduate
Research Program (S.U.R.P.), I am learning even more about
research and clinical medicine. In my work, I am determining
the effect of the absence of the N-ras protooncogene on induced
tumorigenesis. By conducting molecular oncology research for
another summer, I have greatly expanded my knowledge and interest
in the field. In addition, through my experiences in the Radiation
Oncology Department with Dr. S., I clearly see the greater
purpose of medical research beyond personal intellectual gratification.
In the case of cancer and many other diseases, research is
the only way to overcome the limitations of current clinical
treatments.
I believe
that one of the greatest joys and privileges of physicians
are their abilities to directly aid and affect a community.
While becoming interested in the science of medicine through
research, I have explored human service to understand the art
of medicine. When I volunteered in the Emergency Room of New
England Medical Center during my sophomore year, many physicians
impressed me with their sensitivity and compassion. When not
assisting the hospital staff, I took every opportunity to comfort
patients who felt scared and vulnerable. During that same year,
I also tutored a middle-aged woman in English as a Second Language.
It was challenging to teach her vocabulary and sentence structure
since, initially, simple communication with her had been difficult.
Helping her pass the high school equivalency exam made all
of my efforts worthwhile. In addition, I have been an Associate
Advisor for freshmen for the past two years. In this role,
I have helped first year students adjust to college life. Not
only have I played the role of academic mentor, but I have
also become an intimate friend and personal tutor to my advisees.
For my efforts, I won the annual Outstanding Associate Advisor
Award.
Besides individual
volunteering, I have taken the initiative to help the local
community on a greater scale. As Community Service Chair for
the Chinese Student's Club for the past two years, I established
a new program to promote the interaction between MIT students
and underprivileged teenagers. College students and children
affiliated with a local community organization, Boston Asian:
Youth Essential Service, have become acquainted through regular
activities. Through events such as a scavenger hunt and a hands-on
introduction to the World Wide Web, MIT volunteers help teenagers
learn about the opportunities available at college. Along with
several other undergraduates, I have become further acquainted
with the teens through individual tutoring. To establish this
new service program, I have done intensive planning and budget
management. I have refined rough, creative ideas into organized
activities involving over twenty people. During the planning
stages, I have worked closely with professional youth counselors,
other MIT participants, and the teens. While my involvement
in this program has been very demanding at times, seeing these
teens learn and develop their interests has definitely made
it worthwhile.
During college
I have learned many things outside of lecture halls and libraries.
In research labs, I have refined my intellectual curiosity
and scientific thought processes. In the local community, I
have developed my interpersonal skills and a greater understanding
of others. Through it all, I have learned to treasure the simple
pleasures of helping others. By becoming a physician, I will
continue to develop and apply these personal attributes.
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Survivor
of Anorexia; Emergency Medical Technician Training; Clinic
Experience; Medical Volunteer in Honduras; HIV Test Counselor
I decided
that I wanted to be a doctor sometime after my four month incarceration
in Columbia Presbyterian Children's Hospital in the winter
of 1986-87, as I struggled with anorexia nervosa. Through the
maturation process that marked my recovery, I slowly came to
realize that my pediatrician had saved my life-despite my valiant
efforts to the contrary. Out of our individual stubborn wills
was born a kind of mutual respect, and he is one of the people
who make up my small collection of heroes.
I admire
doctors who understand both what is said and what is held back,
who move comfortably around the world of the body, and who
treat all patients with respect. I am lucky because a few of
them have become my impromptu teachers, taking a little extra
time to instruct me in anatomy, disease or courtesy. During
my Emergency Medical Technician training, one of the emergency
room doctors took me to radiology to point out the shadow of
a fracture in a CT-scan and trusted me to hold a little girl's
lip while he inserted sutures. The physicians in the Hospital
12 de Octubre in Madrid, Spain taught me to hear lung sounds
and to feel an enlarged liver and spleen. They explained the
social and medical difficulties associated with the management
of pediatric AIDS until I understood the Spanish well enough
to begin asking questions; then they answered them.
I work now
in the Mayfield Community Clinic, which provides primary care
to members of the Spanish-speaking community near Stanford
University. My job as a patient advocate involves taking histories,
performing simple procedures and providing family planning
and HIV counseling. I try to use the knowledge I have gained
from class and practice to formulate the right set of questions
to ask each patient, but I am constantly reminded of how much
I have to learn. I look at a baby and notice its cute, pudgy
toes. Dr. V. plays with it while conversing with its mother,
and in less than a minute has noted its responsiveness, strength,
and attachment to its parent, and checked its reflexes, color
and hydration. Gingerly, I search for the tympanic membrane
in the ears of a cooperative child and touch an infant's warm,
soft belly, willing my hands to have a measure of Dr. V.'s
competence.
I first felt
the need to be competent regarding the human body when I volunteered
with the Amigos de Las Americas program in the town of T. in
Lempira, Honduras. The hospital available to the people of
T. (at a day's ride in the bed of a truck) was "where one went
to die," so my partner and I, with our basic first aid certifications
and our $15 Johnson & Johnson kits, quickly became makeshift "doctors".
The responsibility initially created a heady feeling; a distressed
mother called on us to bandage the toe her eight-year-old son
had accidentally sliced to the bone with his machete. I told
him the story of Beauty and the Beast in broken Spanish while
my partner and I soaked the dirt from his toe, and during the
following week we watched him heal.
Then our
foster-mother, who normally tended to the sick, told my partner
and me to "check on the foot" of D. The gentle-eyed, sixty-five
year old man lay on his bed, his leg encased in bloody bandages
from mid-calf to toe. After performing surgery, the hospital
had given him a bottle of injectable antibiotics and some clean
needles and sent him home without bandages or further instructions.
My partner and I had not been trained to handle so serious
a situation. We did not know what had happened; we did not
know what the antibiotics were (or if they were actually antibiotics);
we did not know if handling D.'s blood put us at risk for disease.
We wanted to leave, but leaving the house meant leaving D.
and betraying our foster-mother's trust. So we injected the
antibiotics and cleaned and bandaged the wound every day for
our remaining two weeks in Honduras although we felt ill-equipped
for the responsibility, crippled by our ignorance and lack
of supplies.
In T., I
did not feel qualified to receive the trust the townspeople
gave so willingly. As an HIV-antibody test counselor in California,
I struggle everyday to win my clients' confidence. Somehow
a twenty-one-year-old, Caucasian female must be sincere, knowledgeable
and open enough to earn the respect of a fifty-five-year-old
man who could be her father, a high school sophomore, an ex-drug
addict, and a pregnant Latina woman. My clients are black,
white, straight, gay, Ph.D. candidates and illiterate; some
choose to come to me while others have court-orders. Yet to
communicate effectively, each client must have enough confidence
in me to engage in dialogue about his drug or sex life and
to believe what I tell him, whether or not he chooses to act
on our discussion.
Speaking
with patients, doctors and community members has opened my
eyes to some of the difficulties involved with healthcare provision,
and I hope I have given some inspiration or comfort in exchange
for the knowledge I have received. I want these lessons in
openness and compassion to shape my understanding of medicine
and allow me to become the type of doctor I admire.
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Sample
Essay: ACLU Volunteer
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When I began
volunteering at the American Civil Liberties Union of Michigan,
I was a doctoral candidate in English literature, a budding
scholar of the early novel. By the time I stopped volunteering
ten months later, I had learned that I wanted to become a litigator,
a lawyer who brought his political beliefs and persuasive writing
to bear on some of the most important social issues of the
day. My experiences at the A.C.L.U. opened my eyes not only
to the complexity and urgency of impassioned legal work but
also to my own professional aspirations.
Under the
supervision of the A.C.L.U.'s generous and busy legal director,
I was quickly exposed to many aspects of practical lawyering.
My first job-assessing and responding to the organization's
voluminous mail-required me to analyze the fact patterns that
various correspondents presented. The many incoming accounts
of police brutality, judicial indifference, and prison rape
were often moving and frequently suspect. They forced me to
temper my emotional responses and determine whether the complaints
seemed both factually plausible and within the A.C.L.U.'s limited
purview. After this challenging introduction, I was then asked
to assist in the discovery phase of a prisoner's rights case.
This work was detailed and intricate: my job was to reconstruct
the specific events of a day in 1991 while searching for conflicts
between the prison's official regulations and the actual conduct
of its guards. As I called Michigan prisons for information,
sifted through ten years of our client's prison records, and
helped endlessly revise our pleadings, I learned a good deal
about the small chores and thankless legal persistence that
go into building cases.
At the same
time, I found considerable overlap between my new legal tasks
and my ongoing academic work. In an A.C.L.U. case I assisted
in, for example, a judge overturned a state ban on partial
birth abortion because the procedure had no precise meaning
in the graduate lexicon, and the legislation might thus chill
a wide variety of graduate practices. What fascinated me was
that when confronted with the task of interpreting a knotty
and important text, the twentieth-century legal system made
many of the same interpretive moves as the eighteenth-century
novel readers I had studied in my English graduate work. As
the case unfolded, the pleadings debated the legislators' authorial
intentions; the relevant Supreme Court and Sixth Circuit precedents;
the contradictory testimony of various graduate experts; and,
finally, the language of the statute itself. Like my eighteenth-century
readers, modern textual interpreters were attempting to make
sense of a silent, ambiguous document by finding ways to situate
it within different historical, intertextual, and linguistic
contexts. While particular interpretive conventions have changed
over the centuries-modern lawyers cite prior cases and not
Biblical parables to bolster their arguments-I came to realize
that the broader task of comprehending texts (whether artistic
expression or legislation) has not. Moreover, as I roamed through
the stacks of Michigan's graduate and law libraries, I increasingly
began to believe that it is precisely through interpretation,
through embracing particular readings of Robinson Crusoe over
others or through fighting over the legal standing of terms
such as "partial birth abortion" that a society obliquely expresses
its priorities and values as well as its blind spots.
I began making
these connections partly because my work on the prisoner's
rights case had forced me to question my own values and unspoken
assumptions. Was I being co-opted by working on behalf of an
unrepentant racist and murderer who complained at having some
writings and a swastika confiscated by prison officials? Or
was I defending the rights of future prisoners who might be
writing less like our client and more like John Bunyan, Henry
David Thoreau, or Martin Luther King, Jr.? Had I succumbed
to the knee-jerk First Amendment absolutism that the A.C.L.U.
is sometimes accused of? I thought I knew what public policy
I supported but I became sorely aware of my legal ignorance:
much as I needed to do so, I felt ill-equipped to objectively
assess and synthesize the various judicial precedents that
pertained to the case. Although I was frustrated by my uncertainties
and limited knowledge, I found myself increasingly excited
by the questions I was trying to ask. By the time I finally
threw myself into the bittersweet task of assisting a murderer,
I had learned both how little I knew of the law and how much
I valued the nuanced, committed defense of civil liberties.
My volunteer
work left me wanting to do more in the legal sphere. While
the law may be too ungainly and inefficient a vehicle to directly
change the world, it offers a unique opportunity to help influence
people's interpretation of their world. With the knowledge
and skills imparted by a legal education, I hope to get back
to crafting public arguments over abortion, prisoners' rights,
Internet expression, and other defining issues of our day.
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